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Did you guys even read the story? Did you Like The Story?? ??? ???

Why even make a thread?

You can't even sell fanfiction in the first place since IT contains copyrighted characters already.

It's still selling fan-fiction.

No, it's promoting the bigger product and expanding the fanbase to idiots who will actually buy that sort of stuff just because it has the franchise label slapped onto it.

It's still written by fans, thus making it fan-fiction, albeit franchised fan-fiction.

If you guys want me to put it back on can you guys not copy it and sell it?? Plz and thanks and maybe i might just post it again. Maybe

Hey, at least he tried. (If you consider that trying)

Haven't we all been there at least once?

This can't be serious. And I'm fitting to put it on YTMND as one of those "A Dramatic Reading" things.

Mike, the sad thing is, no "literary troll" would write THAT much.

And they were all named after Nerds flavours.

Skip to page 10 or 11 tell me if its still the worst  :D

Jaker, I read your story and decided to revise it.
I put strikes through everything that either had a grammatical error, wasn't important to the story, wasn't spelled properly, wasn't entertaining or all of the above.

I've uploaded my revisions to this post.

If I thought this was a serious attempt at story writing, I would feel bad for this kid right now as we are being rather mean about it all, forsaking all kinds of subtlety and modern manners. But what are modern manners, these days? The internet sustains pleasantries like FEMA rescues flood victims.

Anyway what I'm saying is, this is atrocious, yeah. It's so bad, it must be a farce. But, if I put myself in the shoes of someone putting up an honest work and having it tenderized like this, I'd be very upset.

But since this was clearly a crude attempt at some lampoon, say whatever you want. I just think too much.

Now heres one thing im gonna say... If you dont have anything nice to say dont say it at all.  ::)

Do i even get any credit for the story??

I'd stop whining and try to write one that didn't suck so hard.

Also one more thing... Treat others the way you wanna be treated. :)

how would you guys like it if u were treated the same exact way??

how would you guys like it if u were treated the same exact way??

Write a story that isn't a recycled piece of crap.
Come up with something original.
Something new and creative.

1) Start with an original concept.
Like a fire breathing cowboy who fights angels, demons, murderous high school students, and his conceived children that he didn't even know about.

2) Give it a story.
Like the cowboy just got done traveling across the globe and has finally settled down in a city where his bounty hunting services are needed, and unknown to him he's actually being used as an advocate for the divine. Oh yeah, and he had a got a lot of women pregnant and left them so they had kids who were all special in their own way 'cause of stuff, like one's a demigod homosexual while another is a wheelchair bound, paralyzed telepath. So like, the kids were all born into hard lives and they blamed their father whom they never knew and stuff, so they all want revenge or something. Eventually they all track him down to the city. It all gets mashed into a bunch of gun battles, explosions, and semi-cliche lines about living and the future and stuff. At least it's interesting.
Also, don't use that, I've been trying to weave that into a good tale for a few years now.

3) Add depth.
Give the story depth. Describe the character's appearances, but not all of their features at once, draw it out a bit. Give all the characters unique personalities. Trying thinking about how they would act in a regular situation. If you don't make the characters have some sense of life or they'll all just be cardboard cutouts.
Never write things like 'They fight!' or 'He walked.' Make everything sound interesting.

Yeah, do stuff better.

Can u guys at least see if the 2ND one is any better?? if you want to send me a message telling me.

if you have NOTHING nice to say say NOTHING at all!

How is that Life?

Babies do it! Fall down, get up. Falling down hurts, don't fall down. And that sticks, so they don't fall down anymore.

Write a story that isn't a recycled piece of crap.
Come up with something original.
Something new and creative.

1) Start with an original concept.
Like a fire breathing cowboy who fights angels, demons, murderous high school students, and his conceived children that he didn't even know about.

2) Give it a story.
Like the cowboy just got done traveling across the globe and has finally settled down in a city where his bounty hunting services are needed, and unknown to him he's actually being used as an advocate for the divine. Oh yeah, and he had a got a lot of women pregnant and left them so they had kids who were all special in their own way 'cause of stuff, like one's a demigod homosexual while another is a wheelchair bound, paralyzed telepath. So like, the kids were all born into hard lives and they blamed their father whom they never knew and stuff, so they all want revenge or something. Eventually they all track him down to the city. It all gets mashed into a bunch of gun battles, explosions, and semi-cliche lines about living and the future and stuff. At least it's interesting.
Also, don't use that, I've been trying to weave that into a good tale for a few years now.

3) Add depth.
Give the story depth. Describe the character's appearances, but not all of their features at once, draw it out a bit. Give all the characters unique personalities. Trying thinking about how they would act in a regular situation. If you don't make the characters have some sense of life or they'll all just be cardboard cutouts.
Never write things like 'They fight!' or 'He walked.' Make everything sound interesting.

Yeah, do stuff better.

if you have NOTHING nice to say say NOTHING at all!

: Captain Sanoguchi  31 October 2008, 01:08:36

Write a story that isn't a recycled piece of crap.
Come up with something original.
Something new and creative.

1) Start with an original concept.
Like a fire breathing cowboy who fights angels, demons, murderous high school students, and his conceived children that he didn't even know about.

2) Give it a story.
Like the cowboy just got done traveling across the globe and has finally settled down in a city where his bounty hunting services are needed, and unknown to him he's actually being used as an advocate for the divine. Oh yeah, and he had a got a lot of women pregnant and left them so they had kids who were all special in their own way 'cause of stuff, like one's a demigod homosexual while another is a wheelchair bound, paralyzed telepath. So like, the kids were all born into hard lives and they blamed their father whom they never knew and stuff, so they all want revenge or something. Eventually they all track him down to the city. It all gets mashed into a bunch of gun battles, explosions, and semi-cliche lines about living and the future and stuff. At least it's interesting.
Also, don't use that, I've been trying to weave that into a good tale for a few years now.

3) Add depth.
Give the story depth. Describe the character's appearances, but not all of their features at once, draw it out a bit. Give all the characters unique personalities. Trying thinking about how they would act in a regular situation. If you don't make the characters have some sense of life or they'll all just be cardboard cutouts.
Never write things like 'They fight!' or 'He walked.' Make everything sound interesting.

Yeah, do stuff better.

That would make a swell comic book or TV show, but not much of a book.
Maybe an illustrated book.

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if you have NOTHING nice to say say NOTHING at all!